As a follow up to last week's mini-lesson and practice session using quotation marks, here is an opportunity to practise the four rules for quotation marks using the computer keyboard.
Choose which image you would like to use and write a conversation that that animal, or those animals, might be having if they could talk. Don't forget the 4 rules of quotation marks! If you need a reminder, check out the anchor chart in the classroom which we made last week!
"I'm bored,'' said Bobby the koala.''I want to make something, maybe an atomic bomb, nah, to dangerous.''..."I'm hungry, at least I get something to do.''
ReplyDeletewritten by Reuben! :) >_< x-(:) :D :O '_'
Hi Reuben, I really liked your comment, especially the part where the animal wanted to make an atomic bomb.
DeleteHowever,I do think it would be better if it was longer.
Overall, your comment was great!
from Yinan
Great work, Reuben! Now, can you work out when to use to and too correctly? Please reply with your explanation. :)
ReplyDeleteI figured it out, it's too instead of to.
Delete"yikes!", yelled the platypus tins.
ReplyDeleteGood use of an exclamation mark, Ryan.
DeletePlease check all of your spelling before you publish.
This is a good start.
"You're so soft!" comented BooBoo the platypus.
ReplyDelete"Yeah, I'm really soft, thanks " thanked Mumble.
"Dinner time" informed Mum,
"OH Boy DINNER TIME" chanted BooBoo and Mumble.
"Yes, mashed shrip our favourites"
Good job Tom.You made a good start.
DeleteYou need to leave a line for a new person that's speaking
Next you did'nt use said which is incredible I used said only once.
From Thomas
Dear Tom,
DeleteI personally think you did well
but remember to check your spelling
overall it was interesting.
from Reuben!
"'Hevvo ladies and gnts.'
ReplyDelete'This is my own show .'
'As veu can see i'm eating a gumleave.'
'This is the end of my show.'
'sefa'
by gum eater.
Hi Naveen,
DeleteI like your use of it being like the koala is actualy is eating gum leaves.
But next time try to not to go over easy because some bits are sort of confusing, but all and all it was fantastic!
From Tom
"I'm cuter than you," whispered Johny.
ReplyDelete"No I'm cuter!" yelled PJ.
"How are you cuter than me, your so ugly" exclaimed Johny.
"Now let's get on with a different topic," said PJ
"Good idea PJ,why don't we have a swim," agreed Johny
"Yeh but these hands won't let us go," moaned PJ
"Hey hands put us down, come on put us down!" Barked Johny
"You know that they don't understand us," whispered PJ
"Yeh I I Know that," whispered Johny
"I'm hungry!!!!" yelled PJ
"Same" replied Johny
Well done Chad for writing so much .
Deletegood job.
Soooooooo funny!
DeletePlease include Marks and full stops next time (!?.).
Good use of time.
Heya, Chad.
DeleteI think your comment was very funny especiallly when Jonny told the hand to let go.
from Yinan
"I got a leaf in my mouf." mumble the kola. "aaaaaarrrrr I'm tied" yawned the kola. "I like leaves"
ReplyDeleteGood job on chaging said into mumble.
DeleteI think you should improve on your punctuation and spelling.
This is a very good start to your story
good job Matt,
Deletebut try to spell all the words correctly,
whats next?
'I love the pond' said poppy
ReplyDelete'I do to but it herts my eys' replied abbey
'well your a baby'
'no im not
'yeah you are'
; no im not
'sorry'
thats ok
'do You want to go for a swim
'yes''
'wait i have some gogals'
'or thanks'
'thats ok'
Dear Abbey,
DeleteI like your idea of googols.
Mabe you should work on having your chariters say more.
I like your idea of quocation marks.
"Hi Jake," yelled Frankenstein
ReplyDeletegood choice of name
Deleteplease next time if you are going to use yelled use a ! to make it better
please maybe you could write more
good jod jake
Deletemaybe next time write some more
i love the names you p;icked
from abbey
Good job Jake with putting the talking marks.
Deletemaybe you could write a little bit more.
great job on putting the commer and capital letters jake
I like the name Frankenstein.
Delete"Hello bob".replied Greg
ReplyDelete"Hi Greg".cried Bob
"What are you going to do today"?said Greg
'well i'm going to go shopping today and what are you going to do today".answered Bob.
"I'm going to the footy match,Hawthorh vs Collingwood". murmured Greg.
"It's so nice out here because the sun is just bueatiful!" yelled Bob.
"I know it's just the right tempreture,35 degrees".Yawned Greg
COOL AS
DeleteGood job at using the talking marks Aiden. Try to correct your spelling before you publish yours. Great work!
DeleteA koala called Keith who was munching on leaves on a Friday morning was getting ready for the food eating contest for koalas in the afternoon at five past one.
ReplyDelete"I will finish eating these leaves and go to sleep," lied Keith to his mum as he munched on another one. The truth was, Keith somehow managed to sleep only twelve hours a day. He booked a place for the food eating contest wthout his mum knowing. "That's a good boy," replied his mum smiling as she spoke.
In the afternoon at twenty-five minutes past twelve, Keith had everythng he needed for the contest. Food, food, food and more food. Oh. I forgot to tell you that when Keith was eating the leaves, he was just testing out if the leaves tasted nice.
Oh well thought Keith. At least it will be easy to sneak out of my tree because my mother s already asleep. But he didn't know that his mum was at the exit of the tree doing work......
Great at the ouotation marks that you put them in the correct place
DeleteYou've got te most awesome writing but it also a little too much
yo are the top number one writer but what will you write next
''I'm bored'' Jim sighed.
ReplyDelete'' me too'' Jj yawned.
''I wish I was a person like lady gaga'' Jim yelled.
''No I want to be gaga'' groaned Jj.
''You wish I going to be gaga because your not good''Jim shouted.
Your writting is excitinly great.
DeleteGreat Quotaion marks.
Next time do someone else.
"I'm bored," yawned the koala. "Maybe I will visit my friend, Professor Atomic Platypus." So he decided to go to the extreme dangerous lab of Professor Platypus. Just as he was about to leave, there was a phone call from Professor Platypus and the Koala, Bobby picked up the phone and he answered " Hi Professor, I was going to go to your place, and then I heard the phone ring." He didn't answer.
ReplyDelete"Anyone there?" Still no answer. Then a huge ball of light, bigger than his bedroom exploded. He was trying to go back but the force of the gravity was too strong for a koala. He held onto the table but the ball of light carried him in. "Ahhhhhhhh!" screamed Bobby..... to be continued
Great job at your spelling Ernest.
DeleteI don't know what can you inprove Ernest.
I also like the interesting words that you typed in like Atomic and exploded.
"I hate been picked up!"shouted Kenny the platypus
ReplyDelete"don't be sad" said Penny the platypus
can you make me a super slimy bomb and hit it to me so that people will slip off me" giggled Kenny
"no because i wan you yo no that we have super sharp laws if I touch it might explode on me" replied Penny
"don't worry you make it then I'll explode it and that's it" exclaimed Kenny
"wait what if the bomb explode area is huge then evevryone will get slimy and that means we won't get out of here" answered penny
"you what it thatyu leave first then make the bomb and that it then you grab a rope and I'll get" said kenny
From Taylor
From Taylor
Well done Taylor. I liked your funny story very much. This story is also very creative. I like the names of your platypuses too.
DeletePlease check your spelling and punctuation. Also, please press the space bar before you type another word. Check your story when you finished please.
Overall, you did an awesome job.
"I'm way too hungry to be in the zoo!" fussed dobby the platypus.
ReplyDelete"I know", agreed bobby the platypus, "we'll have to eeet sumfink,"
"You don't speak properly!" yelled dobby.
"Hey, that is soooooo vooood!" connfesed bobby.
"it's rude, not vood" dobby told bobby.
Meanwhile at the zoo....................................
hey dobby, wha'cha doin'? zobby the koala suddenly called.
"Not only I talks not poperly," bobby told dobby.
Well done, great story.
DeleteI think you should work on putting capital letters on the first letter of someone's name.
This is a very good start.
I think your story was fantastic and halarious. You're right. Bobby really dosen't speak propally.
DeleteNothing to inprove on,
Andy
"Where's mum I'm hungry"grumbled Kate.
ReplyDelete"You know where mum is, she's out fishing"replied Harry to his sister.
"I know but she takes so long"whined Kate
"I'm back kids it's shrimp tonight"their mum called"Oh and dads home from his trip up river so we can have some steamed cuttle fish too!"mum said happly.
"YAY" the twins yelled.
"Help me fimd some bark for the table Harry"his father called
"Okay dad"
Hi Caitlin. Well done on starting a new line for each character talking.
DeleteRemember to punctuate the speech before you close it by putting a comma or, if appropriate, an exclamation mark before the closing talking marks.
I also like how you replaced said with more descriptive words. Even when you used the word said, you wrote "said happily" which is more descriptive than just said. Good job!
"How long till they let us go it's been like 3 hours:(?" yawned Samy,
ReplyDelete"don't know but it has only been like 5 mins"corected Zach,
"Oh" wisperd Samy,"YAY! they are putting us in the water!"
"Want to play hide and find?" arsked Zach
"YES! YES! YES!" Screamed Samy, "My fav"Wisperd Samy
"ok" i will find and you can hide"Explaned Zach
"1.....2......3.......4........5 GO!"
Hi Max. I like how you replaced said with more descriptive words like corrected and yawned.
DeletePlease remember to put a full stop (not a comma) at the end of the sentence. For instance, after Samy on the first line. Then be sure to start the next sentence with a capital letter.
Well done, Max. Oh, and good job with using capital letters and exclamation marks to show excitement!
"Fisss iss sooooo goodd,"mumbled Bobby."I think I better take a rest now,"He said to himself."Mum, im going to bed!"he shouted to his mum who was way over on the other tree. He looked over at his mum and his mum looked back.
ReplyDelete"Ok sweetie,"his mum replied.
"Mum, stop calling me that. Your emmbarassing me."
"Sorry," mum said.
1 good uses of language Aaron
Delete2 check your splling
3 and good mumbled at the start
from mika
Sup Aaron,
DeleteCool story I like how the koala is talking to his mum in the other tree because there is only on koala in the picture. I didn't get what fisss means, but good story all together,
From Tom
Hi Aaron!
DeleteI like how you followed Rule 3 of Quotation Marks but putting punctuation (a comma or exclamation mark) before closing the speech. Excellent job!
You can improve your accuracy even more by editing to check for little punctuation mistakes. For instance, in the first line He should not have a capital letter and in the second line im should be I'm.
Well done on listening carefully and applying the rules of quotation marks! Oh, and I can tell that "Fisss" is really the koala saying "This" with his mouth full. :)
''I am furless''cried nat.
ReplyDelete''No you are not furless''reply pat
''Yes I am''cried nat.''and I hate being furless'' said nat
''But I like being furless''revealed pat.
''YOU LIKE BEING FURLESS?''yelled nat.
''Yes I do''told pat.''Do you know why?''.asked pat
''No''cried nat.
''Because you don't wet when you go siwmming''say pat.
''Ok you made me you made me happy agreed nat
Hi Lanchu. Well done on starting a new line whenever a different character is speaking. :)
DeleteIn future, please remember to always use a capital letter at the start of anyone's name.
I really like the conversation topic of being furless. Well done!
"Well one more day in a old gumtree"said Thomas chrunch bite snap
ReplyDelete"Oh no I forgot that I need to go to the pond for water"exclaimed Thomas
"Hey hi Thomas"
"Hello who's there"?
"It's me Tom"
''Oh hi'"
"What are you up to?"
"Oh nothing I was just going to the pond to get some water for dinner"
"Oh by Thomas"
"By Tom"yelled Thomas
By Thomas
"I'm huuungrrryyy." whined Wrinkles
ReplyDelete"Me too." said cad casually.
"Fooooood"
"Stop it Slobberpuss."
Hi Reuben. I like how you describe the way that Cad spoke as "casually".
DeleteDon't forget that the punctuation before the closing speaking marks needs to be a comma or, if appropriate, an exclamation mark. Also check that all names have a capital letter when editing.
I also like the names you chose, especially Slobberpuss!
''You know what fred''
ReplyDelete''what frank''
'I'm cute & youre not
''am to''whined frank.
''are not''teased fred
'' be qiet'' moand george the koala
''why ''
''because I said so''
said the koala
by bree
Hi Bree! Well done on starting a new line when the speaker changes.
ReplyDeletePlease remember to use a capital letter for the start of anyone's name.
I like your use of descriptive words for said like whined and teased. :)